Raoul de Chagny - 2004

[Raoul Jacques de Chagny]

Vicomte Raoul de Chagny

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Player Name: Silence
Years Roleplaying: about 5 years now
Gender: Female
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Basic Information

[/b][/color] Vicomte Raoul Jacques de Chagny
Age: about 23
Canon or OC?: from Phantom of the Opera 2004[/size]
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Appearance

[/b][/color] 6"4
Body type: Tall, but not skinny, get not fat, somewhere in the middle. He likes to think his walk is graceful, but one could say that he clomps around.
Eye color: His eyes are sky blue colored and appear to be darker then they are.
Wardrobe: Well he likes to wear all sorts of things, from loose fitting garments to a soldier like costume for masquerades, but mostly the loose fitting garments I mentioned.
General Appearance: Well Raoul has sky blue eyes that looker more like dark navy colored when you look at them.He has tan hair that is almost blonde. It comes down to about his shoulders. He stands at about six feet four inches. He is on the taller side, but is not really skinny, nor is he fat, he is somewhere in the middle. He usually wears loose fitting garments, but he will wear pretty much anything as long as he believes they look good on him.
Played By: Patrick Wilson
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Personality

[/b][/color] Raoul is pretty much a fop, sad to say, but yes that is the easiest way to describe.He is rather obsessed with his personal appearance and others manners, including his own.To say he disliked the Phantom would be an understatement, he hates the Phantom, absolutely hates him. He loves Christine with all his heart, but has a habit of disliking her singing about the Phantom. Even though Raoul won't take no as an answer, and is extremely straight forward. He is kind and one might say that he is brave.
Dreams and Goals: Well he daydreams about Christine most of the time. His goal is to be rid of the Phantom.
Strengths:
1. Christine's love
2. sword fighting
3. he's the vicomte
Weaknesses:
1. voice - not the best singer in the world...
2. his dislike for the Phantom
3. his dislike for Christine singing for the Phantom
Fears:
1. The Phantom taking Christine
2. Christine leaving him for the Phantom
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The Past

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Mother: Marie de Chagny
Father: James de Chagny
History:
[[ i think this might be easier to write out if i used Raoul's point of view for just the history, so that is what i am going to do and i apologize if that's not the way it's supposed to be written]]

I was born in the rich family of James de Chagny and Marie de Chagny. I knew I was always going to be that rich little boy who went to that only boys academy, and to be honest I didn’t really mind. Just like I had suspected, I went to an all boys’ school for about only about six years, until my mother died from an unknown illness, that hadn’t been caught early on, so there was no cure that was known. My father, broken hearted, and I moved to Sweden, where I attended a regular academy, also where I met the women that stole my heart, Christine Daae, only daughter of the Swedish violinist, Gustave Daae [[Christine (in the movie) was in that one room lighting candles and there was a picture that said Gustave, so I am guessing that was her father’s name]].
It wasn’t long before Christine and I were close friends. I had made up a nick name for her, Little Lotte, which I think she rather adored. We would tell dark stories of the north to each other in her attic eating a picnic lunch while her father played the violin in the back ground. I knew Christine for only about a year, until she was orphaned at seven and taken out of my life.
I never really knew what became of Christine, but I continued to attend the same academy and wonder wherever she could have gone. After a few years I got over the loss of my friend and started to see other girls. I never liked any of them like I had Christine, but then again they weren’t Christine.
Years after Christine had left, when I was nearly twenty three, friends of my father, Giles Andre and Richard Firmin, were taking over the Opera Populaire when the old manager retired. They wanted me to be their patron. In the beginning I didn’t really want to be a patron for the opera house, but agreed despite myself. When I visited the first time, I instantly fell in love with it, and the girl who had once swept my heart up. The Opera Populaire was an old building and I couldn’t find any reason not like it there, even better Christine lived there too. But there was one thing standing between us: the Phantom of the Opera, who I believed was just a made up fable. That belief quickly vanished.

RP Sample

Raoul muttered crossly to himself, he was having a horrible day. Christine had been kidnapped by the Phantom, he assumed. He paced his room, sky blue eyes, appearing more navy, narrowed in anger. He made a kick at his desk and cursed at the pain that jolted through his black booted foot. He growled softly, “Where is she!?” He continued to pace, slightly favoring his left foot. He ran a hand through his blonde hair and sighed. He’d received a letter from the Phantom, and pulled the note from his pocket to future inspect it. The Angel of Music has Christine under his wing, make no attempt to see her again.. Andre and Firmin had received several notes as well, oh and that diva Carlotta had received one and thought Raoul sent it to her. He snorted, like he would. Sure he didn’t really like the woman, but he wouldn’t threaten her. Never!
He sat down on the edge of his bed and sighed softly once more. He just wanted to find Christine and throw his arms around her and never let her girl. Another sigh escaped from his mouth. He got up once more and continued his pacing. He didn’t know what to do, but he didn’t exactly want to barge into the Phantom’s lair, wherever it might be. He leaned against the wall and sucked in a breath, crossing his arms, deciding to just wait it out.

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[|ADMIN LEFFIE|]

Hello, Silence! I gotta tell you, I really love Patrick Wilson's Raoul, but your app could use a little work. You've got the basics of Raoul down, I think, but there are a few things that you need to flesh him out on. You've got pretty good grammar, so there's no problem there, don't worry! :3

The only things I would say would be to add more to personality and history. His appearance is fine, though you may want to add how being an aristocrat affects how he carries himself and what he wears (and isn't Patrick Wilson blue eyed, rather than brown eyed?). For personality, you've focused mostly on his love of Christine, but being an aristocrat means his life can't be revolved around her. Talk about him being a patron of the opera house and why he wants to fund it, and think about how he has a very straightforward attitude ("Two minutes, Litte Lotte!" "♫We have all been blind, and yet the answer is staring us in the face!♫" and the like), and how he won't take no for an answer. He's of course brave and kind, and that would also influence his relationship with Christine. I do like how you focused on it though, so don't lose that! Christine is indeed his whole world!

For history, you've again focused mostly on Christine. Talk about before he met Christine, and how he came to be a patron of the opera, and talk about what happened during the story a bit more. Your sample is good, but I was wondering where Raoul was and at what point in the story he was worried about Christine, though I assume it's just before Notes (which you could mention the Note he received saying "The Angel of Music has her under his wing. Make no attempt to see her again"). You said dressing room, but then there's the bed? Confusion!!!!! xD

Anywho, I really like your Raoul, he just needs to be a bit fleshed out more. Also, I don't think de Chagny has an apostrophe before the Chagny, and de is not capitalized. Also, wouldn't you rather use the French equivalent of James, which is Jacques? Since he is French. xD

[|ADMIN LEFFIE|]

Ah yes! This is much better! His history is totally different from most Raoul's history, which is a GOOD thing! I think you could still add more in his personality, but since you wrote his history in first person (which is perfectly fine, and if you want you can write him in first person all the time, so long as you have my permission, or another admins, and I'm giving you my permission now), I think I got the gist of his personality. :3

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